Water pollution has been an increasing problem over the last few decades . what causes water pllution? How can we prevent the problem ?

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Over the
last
few decades,The contamination of
water
has been increasing.
This
is a serious issue
which is
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concerned
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concerns
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by
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everyone.These are two problems of
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apply
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the
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water
pollution
,One is
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the
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an
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the
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industries
sector and
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the other
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other
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the other
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one is chemical
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wastage
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wastages
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wastage
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.During
this
phenomenon act,We will discuss
about
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the causes and
solution
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solutions
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on
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this
essay.
To begin
with,an
industries
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industry's
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waste oil is directly
disposing
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disposed
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to
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of in
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the rivers and seas.During
this
activity
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activity,
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the
water
is being polluting
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is being polluted
is polluting
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more and the sea
creatures
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creatures'
creature's
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life
also
affecting
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affected
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.The same
water
only getting
getting
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apply
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fish for
the
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human foods.It occurs both the same.Next,
People
are putting waste chemical particles into the
water
.It has high toxic
level
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levels
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to affect the
environment
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environmental
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condition.
For instance
,
rain
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in
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water
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the water
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cycling method the
water
vapour to
othe
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other
cloud
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clouds
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and
dropping
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the
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acid rain
water
.In
this
condition
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condition,
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everyone
get
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suffers from
the
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skin allergies and
cold
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colds
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.These reasons may
occurs
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occur
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indirectly to our health
then
then
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the
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solution
is write
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is to write
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it
on
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the next paragraph.
Therefore
there are two conditions to prevent
the
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water
pollution
.In
first
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the first
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method
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method,
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industries
should be
audit
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audited
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by the
governement
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government
.
While
taking
this
type of action the
occuring
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occurring
will
be stop
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be stopped
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then
the
filteration
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filtration
process to
be do
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do
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the same.Emerging to all factories for making the process to audit yearly once.As are result the
accurance
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accuracy
value of
water
pollution
is to be reduced.
Secondly
,the chemical wastages must be
segragate
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segregated
segregate
and
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disposed
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dispose
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dispose of
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it properly.Government should monitoring and who polluting the
water
they could take
a
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seviour
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serious
saviour
action.
People
should
aware
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be aware
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about
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of
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this
problem to
reduce
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reduce it
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.
Moreover
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the rules and regulations
is
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are
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folloed
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followed
by the
people
and
this
water
pollution
is never be happened.
As a
result
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result,
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there is good environment and
water
pollution
to be avoided.If the process is
doing
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done
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frequently the
water
pollution
will eject.
At
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my conclusion
point
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the cause of
the
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water
pollution
is to be avoided by taking some measures.
This
to
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is to
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be
control
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controlled
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and
monitor
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monitored
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by the government
also
inspecting
an
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apply
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industries
and our
people
.They will adhere
the
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function.
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