The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry
The flow chart shows the way in which
bricks
are made for the building industry.
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Overall
, there are 7 stages in the whole Linking Words
brick producing
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brick-producing
process
, beginning with the digging up of Use synonyms
clay
and ending with the delivery of the Use synonyms
bricks
to the customers.
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To begin
, the Linking Words
clay
used to make the Use synonyms
bricks
is dug up from the ground by a large digger. Use synonyms
This
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clay
is Use synonyms
then
placed onto a metal grid, which is used to break up the Linking Words
clay
into smaller pieces. A roller assists in Use synonyms
this
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process
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Following
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this
, sand and water are added to the Linking Words
clay
, and Use synonyms
this
mixture is turned into Linking Words
bricks
by either placing it into a mould or using a wire cut. Use synonyms
Next,
these Linking Words
bricks
are placed in a drying oven to dry for 24 - 48 hours.
In the subsequent stage, the Use synonyms
bricks
go through a heating and cooling Use synonyms
process
.
They are heated in a kiln at a moderate and Use synonyms
then
a high temperature (ranging from 200c to 1300c), followed by a cooling Linking Words
process
in a cooling chamber for 48- 72 hours. Use synonyms
Finally
,
the Linking Words
bricks
are packed and delivered to their destinations.Use synonyms
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