The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year and the year after it was reffurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied thet were with their visit, during th same two periods.

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The table demonstrates how many guests paid a visit to Ashdown Museum in two different periods, which are before and after the renovation.
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, the bar graph illustrates the survey results regarding the satisfaction of tourists during their visit between two different periods as well. At first glance, it is clearly apparent that the number of tourists has dramatically rocketed,
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for the satisfaction outcome, the proportion of dissatisfied guests has dropped enormously. Upon closer examination of the data, the total number of visitors who come to Ashdown Museum has increased from 74.000 to 92.000. Moving onto the second chart, the satisfaction survey which possesses the highest answer for dissatisfaction before the repair agenda at 40%, has experienced a significant decline to 15% after the renovation. With regard to the people who feel satisfied, it has
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from 15% to 35%,
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respect to before and after
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