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The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000*20.., and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, anamake comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000*20.., and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, anamake comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The bar chart shows how much money was earned by Southland transporting three different objects
in
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 2000 to 2023 and future plans in 2025.
Overall
, it should be noted that meat
products
 generated the lowest revenues in all years and every year got minor,
while
, international tourism made
biggest
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the biggest
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 financial
values
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value
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, except in 2023
that
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the
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 outcomes of
dairy
products
 transcended. In 2000, no group were as profitable as international tourism, it was above $8 billion (
b
) respectively, but, in 2023, it
was
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did
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 not
created
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create
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a
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apply
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financial growth like
dairy
products
 and merely became near $9b. In 2000, we should
be
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have
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 marked,
dairy
products
 in second
garde
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grade
approximately
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at approximately
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 $7b,
However
, in 2023, that made a significant economic growth to $10b. Future exportation
scheme
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schemes
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 in 2025, for both of
these
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these,
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 will increase earnings of international tourism to $10b and decrease
dairy
products
just
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by just
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 about $500 thousand to $9.5b .
In addition
, meat
products profit
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product profits
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were fell
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fell
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down
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apply
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year by year.
Chart
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The chart
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 showed in 2000, meat
products
 gained $6b, in 2023, turned to $5.5b and in the future will become just $5b.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, dairy, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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