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Many people say that we have developed into a “throw-away” culture, because we are filling up our environment with so many plastic bags and rubbish that we cannot fully dispose of. To what extent do you agree with this opinion and what measures can you recommend reducing this problem?

The excessive usage of
plastic
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bags
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 is believed as main factor of environmental degradation since the majority of people cannot fully dispose of rubbish from single-use plastics.
This
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 essay agrees with the notion above and will elucidate the explanation throughout the following paragraphs.
To begin
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bags
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 are popular because they are easy to find and convenient to use. Unfortunately, many individuals go shopping without bringing their own reusable
bags
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,
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 and rely on only the readily available
plastic
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bags
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instead
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 which
provided
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 by stores. People find them lightweight and practical for carrying multiple items.
However
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, the problem arises when these
bags
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 are just used once and
then
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 thrown away, which can lead to
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 our environment.
Plastic
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bags
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 take a long time to decompose and we must address
this
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 issue promptly. Governments play a vital role in addressing the excessive use of
plastic
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bags
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. They can implement policies and regulations to reduce their usage.
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, governments can introduce laws that promote reusable
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,
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 as imposing taxes on single-use plastics. Other than that, individuals should
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 take responsibility and actively participate in reducing
plastic
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 bag waste. Sellers,
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, can impose higher prices for consumers who do not bring their own cloth
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 and want to use
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bags
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instead
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. In conclusion, the issue of
plastic
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 bag usage demands immediate attention to reduce its adverse effects on the environment.
While
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plastic
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bags
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 offer convenience, their harmful consequences are far-reaching. Governments should take the lead in implementing policies and raising awareness,
while
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 sellers should actively participate by imposing higher prices and promoting reusable alternatives. By working together, we can reduce our dependency on
plastic
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bags
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.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that you present distinct main points in separate paragraphs, each with its own clear topic sentence. Although your essay demonstrates an attempt at logical structure, the information could be more effectively organized.
coherence cohesion
Introduction and conclusion are present but could be strengthened. The introduction should more clearly outline the essay's upcoming points, and the conclusion should succinctly summarize the key arguments made.
coherence cohesion
You have supported your main points, but the support could be more developed. Aim to elaborate on your points with more detailed explanations and a greater variety of sentence structures to enhance reader understanding.
task achievement
You have addressed the task and provided a clear opinion, which is good. However, to achieve a higher score, the ideas presented need to be expanded with more thorough explanations and justifications throughout the essay.
task achievement
While your ideas are generally clear and understood, strive to present your thoughts more comprehensively. Develop each paragraph with a singular focus and ensure that each idea is elaborated upon sufficiently.
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Employ relevant and specific examples to substantiate your claims. Concrete examples are required to provide evidence for your assertions and to meet the Task Achievement criteria fully. This essay lacks such examples, which would make your arguments more persuasive.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • disposable products
  • convenience-focused consumer habits
  • single-use plastics
  • fast fashion
  • environmental impact
  • landfill waste
  • pollution
  • harm to wildlife
  • recycling infrastructure
  • decomposition
  • public awareness
  • sustainable living practices
  • governmental regulations
  • biodegradable materials
  • recycling technologies
  • sustainable packaging solutions
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