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The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts provide data about the ways of accessing the
news
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 in
Canada
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 and
Australia
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.
Overall
Linking Words
, in
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Canada
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Canada,
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 the main source of accessing the
news
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 is
TV
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,
whereas
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 in
Australia
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 the main source of accessing the
news
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 is online. As can clearly be seen, the main sources of accessing the
news
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 in
Canada
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 are
TV
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with
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at
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 40 per
cent
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 and Online
with
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at
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 36 per
cent
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. After
TV
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 and
news
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 come Print( 14 per
cent
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) and radio(7 per
cent
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). 3 per
cent
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 of accessing the
news
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 in
Canada
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 is not specified. Turning to
Australia
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, the main sources of accessing the
news
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 in
Australia
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 are Online the rate is 52 per
cent
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 and
TV
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 which has 37 per
cent
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. After that comes print which has 7 per
cent
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. 2 per
cent
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 of people in
Australia
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 get information on radio. 2 per
cent
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 of accessing the
news
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 in
Australia
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 is not specified.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words news, canada, australia, tv, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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