The maps show the changes that have taken place at Forton Valley City from 2000 to 2010.

The two maps illustrate how Forton Valley City transformed over a period of 10 years.

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, during

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period, the area underwent dramatic changes. Not only educational sectors and green spaces

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but

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recreational facilities, were improved. As for green space, where the playground stands, there used to be a farmland farm in 2000.

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,the daily farm was converted into a

K.G

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K.G.

school, which had been situated to the north of the park in 2000. By 2010, the park ,located to the east of the parking ,had been completely transformed. With regard to facilities, the shopping centre which lies alongside the west of

Shelfield

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Sheffield

Road did not change at all,

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the park was destroyed to make way for

versity

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cafe.

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, the capacity of the parking was doubled to make adequate room for more private cars. It is worth noting that, Forton University had been built in place of K.G school.

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