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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie
chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the
amount
 of spending money
about
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for
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 3 kinds of groups
while
 the table depicts where the money
come
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comes
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 from over 1 year.
Overall
, it can be seen that the share of salaries in the pie
chart
 is the largest, whereby around three-four of the figure.
On the other hand
, the
amount
 of
budjet
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budget
 in the national government and that of other sources was the biggest and the lowest, respectively.
According to
 the table, in 2017, the
amount
 of
national
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the national
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 government was 175,5m,
where as
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whereas
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 that of
lacal
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local
 taxes was approximately half of that figure.
Moreover
, the
amount
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number
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 of other sources (eg grants) was around triple the share of local taxes, whereby 38m.
In addition
, in 2018, the
amount
 other sources experienced remained the same, whilst that of local taxes increased by 11.1, and the number of national
government
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governments
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 grew from 175.5m to 177.8m. Given to the pie
chart
, the
amount
 of the salary was
three-four
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three
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 the whole
chart
,
while
 in 2018 witnessed an increase
in
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of
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 69%.
Furthermore
, the share of building and transport in two years
were
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was
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an
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apply
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equal number to 17%, and
then
 the percentage
af
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of
 technology
in
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apply
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was 8% in 2017 and
moderate
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moderately
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 increased by 6% in the following year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, amount, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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