The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession
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The bar chart illustrates the
comparision
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comparison
of
salaries
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between
polices
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police
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,
nurses
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,
firefighters
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and underground
drivers
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in
UK
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the UK
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. The table displays the weekly working hours of these careers.
Overall
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, the data reveals most jobs'
salaries
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have no obvious differences between the first
year
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and the third
year
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. The underground
drivers
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have the highest income and the shortest working time. The
salaries
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of
nurses
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,
firefighters
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and underground
drivers
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only
have
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apply
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1,000
pounds
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higher than the first
year
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, and the
salaries
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are 18,000, 40,000 and 50,000
pounds
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in their first
year
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.
In contrast
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, the polices have
2,000
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a 2,000
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salary raise after three years
work
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of work
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,
the
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and the
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third
year
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's wage will become 23,000
pounds
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. The underground
drivers
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have the highest salary, it is 51,000
pounds
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in the third
year
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,
this
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number is twice more than
polices
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police
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, nearly three times higher than
nurses
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and
a
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apply
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1,000
pounds
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more than
firefighters
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.
However
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, their work time is 36 hours,
it
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which
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is shorter than police,
nurses
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and
firefighters
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which are 40, 38 and 55 hours, respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries, nurses, firefighters, drivers, year, pounds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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