The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.

The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.
The bar chart displays the percentile of the genders of
teachers
in six different kinds of educational levels in the UK in 2010.
Overall
, the higher the education setting, the lower the percentage of
women
teachers
.
Also
, the percentage of men
teachers
in early
educations
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are
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ignorable
comparing
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compared to
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women
. The highest
percent
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of
women
teachers
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, as well as the largest gap between male and female teachers,
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as well as
the largest gap between male and female
teachers
had been in Nursery/
pre-school
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preschool
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with more than 95 and respectively, the lowest
percent
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of men
teachers
are in
this
category with less than 5. The data for primary school were roughly the same as pre-school. In secondary school,
women
teachers
were slightly more than men.
However
, in college, they reached an equal
percentile
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. In private training
institute
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and
university
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universities
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, there were more male
teachers
than female ones. In the former, the
teachers
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percentage reached
of
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around 60 for
male
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males
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and 40 for
femal
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female
females
.
Also
, in the
later
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, it peaked for male
teachers
of around 70 and 30 for female.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational settings
  • percentage
  • representation
  • disparities
  • predominance
  • gender imbalance
  • societal expectations
  • historical roles
  • implications
  • trends
  • gender gap
  • educational outcomes
  • gender stereotypes
  • policies
  • initiatives
  • perceptions
  • effectiveness
  • primary school
  • secondary school
  • nursery
  • university
  • further education
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