The diagram shows the process of water treatment
The diagram illustrates how the
water
is treated.
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Overall
, there are four main stages: screening, flocculation, sedimentation, and purification
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, the Linking Words
water
intake goes through a screen to filter big particles, namely solid wastes and rocks, which later be pumped to mix with polyaluminium chloride and oxidants in a flash mix. Use synonyms
The next step is
flocculation where the remaining particles will create a floc that will settle in the sedimentation basin. After the floc is settled, chlorine will be added to the clear Linking Words
water
so it removes bacteria.
To make sure that the Use synonyms
water
is thoroughly clean, additional steps are needed, which are filtering and disinfection. Membranes are planted in the filter to absorb smaller particles, Use synonyms
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in disinfection it uses chemical materials, Linking Words
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as chlorine, lime, and fluoride, to purify Linking Words
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from pathogens. Use synonyms
Finally
, the Linking Words
water
is pumped to the faucet so that it can be used by humans.Use synonyms
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