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and the rest of the world. The measures are given by percentages.

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in the residential areas is the highest in

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worldwide is the highest.

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. As can be seen from the charts, the water

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for the industrial areas is popular for all given zones with 23% in

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worldwide and 33 % in

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about 8%

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figures for other places are more than 39%. It is

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all over the world is 69

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less than worldwide; the figure for the former is 28%

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the rate for the latter is 17%.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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expenditure
allocation
budget
fiscal
increased/decreased spending
percentage
funding
infrastructure
public services
education
healthcare
recreation
welfare
economic conditions
fiscal policy
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The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015

Some people think that people should be given the right to use fresh water as they like. Others believe governments should strictly control the use of fresh water. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many employers offer their employees gyms, sports club. Others believe that it is unnecessary. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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