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In some countries, younger people are neglecting their right to vote. What problems does this cause and what are some of the possible solutions?

#countries #people #right #vote
In the modern era, all
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individuals are given certain
rights
 for
the
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 better lifestyle. But, the
youngsters
 in some nations avoid the use of
right
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 to vote. There are various extrapolates behind
this
 scenario that
leads
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lead
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 to some trouble
to
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 individuals and
further
, I will provide
few
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 remedies to deal with
this
 issue in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, the most prominent issue that arises
due to
 lack of
awarness
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awareness
 among youth is that
country
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the country
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 is going be ruled by
same
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the same
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 politicians
along with
similiar
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similar
 corrupt policies. But, for bright
futures
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futures,
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 it is essential that
youngsters
should
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make correct use of
right
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the right
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 to vote so that better policies
should
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can
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 be formed for the betterment of
nation
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the nation
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. In a democratic country,
right
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the right
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 to vote
act
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acts
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 as
an
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 blessing for citizens to choose
benefical
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beneficial
 rules for them.
Furthermore
,
a
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change and
chance
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change
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is
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also
 significant for a developed society.
For example
, Akali's ruled Punjab for 10 years but there were
alot
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a lot
 of delinquents supporting
this
 party
but
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youngsters
 are not allocating their
rights
therefore
, these same
politicans
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politicians
 are still in power as
youth
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the youth
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 is not ready to step ahead and give
chance
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a chance
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 to another party for the development of the country. I reckon that
awarness
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awareness
 campaigns should be conducted to make the masses aware
about
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 the importance of their all
rights
.
To conclude
,
neglectence
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neglect
 of major
rights
 by youth is totally trivial.
Hence
, essential steps should be followed
for making
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youngsters
 aware
and
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of and
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 benefits of their
rights
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • democratic process
  • political instability
  • skewed representation
  • governance
  • erosion
  • civic education
  • alienation
  • policy-making
  • accessible
  • incentives
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