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The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.

The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.
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The given bar graph provides six different kinds of educational settings in 6 aspects,
such
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 as preschoolschool, primary
school
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, secondary
school
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, college, private training institutes, and universities in the UK in 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 nursery and primary
school
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 have far the highest amounts of
women
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.
Firstly
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, the number of
men
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 in nursery and primary
school
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 are significantly low, in comparison with
women
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.
Men
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's number in these two fields is approximately 6 and 10
percent
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per cent
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,
while
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women
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's are about 98% and 95%. Interestingly,
men
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's total has increased from secondary
school
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 and it continues a rising trend until university, where it reaches its highest ratio in total.
However
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, the proportion of
women
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 who have descended from secondary
school
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 and it is witnessed a slight decrease.
Additionally
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,
men
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's numbers are
leveled
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levelled
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 up to nearly 70% at university, in comparison with
women
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 with 30%. Particularly, in college
women
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's and
men
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's amounts are exactly equal since the percentage is 50.
Lastly
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, the biggest fluctuation between
men
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 and
women
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are
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 in the nursery,
due to
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 the highest number being 98 with
women
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 and the lowest being 6 with
men
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational settings
  • percentage
  • representation
  • disparities
  • predominance
  • gender imbalance
  • societal expectations
  • historical roles
  • implications
  • trends
  • gender gap
  • educational outcomes
  • gender stereotypes
  • policies
  • initiatives
  • perceptions
  • effectiveness
  • primary school
  • secondary school
  • nursery
  • university
  • further education
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