The chart below compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013
The chart depicts the time consumed
for
Australian Change preposition
by
parents
to help their kids
with 4 domestic action
in 2013. Change to a plural noun
actions
Overall
, Motherhood companionship experienced the highest rate among other activities and nearly the same position as the participation of both
mothers and fathers
. That said, fathers
were
rarely accompanied their children individually for dressing, homework, playing games and preparing for sleep in 2013.
There was a trend for mothers in terms of dressing their Unnecessary verb
apply
kids
by reaching 75 % while
fathers
were least participated in apply
situation with only several Change the verb form
applying
occations
. Correct your spelling
occasions
However
, both
parents
did it for 50 % knowing it was above the average percentage even though the disparity between two
personal Correct article usage
the two
companionship
was vividly shown.
Meanwhile, Change to a plural noun
companionships
Fathers
were only positioned by 10 percent
as the significant individual act for housework far under the mothers with Change the spelling
per cent
60
% ratio. Correct article usage
a 60
Both
parents
were
moderately participated in helping their Unnecessary verb
apply
kids
for
housework by 39 %. Playing games Change preposition
with
indicated
as the highest participated Add a missing verb
was indicated
activities
for Fix the agreement mistake
activity
both
parents
with their kids
while
preparing for sleep considered
Wrong verb form
considering
average
percentage for Correct article usage
the average
parents
to accompany them.Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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