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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table compares the amount of
anual
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annual
milk
production
 in
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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, Australia, Tanzania, and
Guatemala
 from 1990 to 2010. Data
represents
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is represented
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 in
litres
.
It is clear that
 throughout the given period, the Netherlands had the highest
production
 of
milk
,
while
Guatemala
 was the least.
Furthermore
, among
three
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the three
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 nations, only Australia that experiencing degradation
on
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in
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the
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apply
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milk
production
. In the Netherlands, people already consumed 11,262,000
litres
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of millk
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millk
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milk
 in the beginning and that number gradually increased
for
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to
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 around 300,000 on average each decade, until reached 11,466,000 in 2010. Even though the
production
 growth
also
occured
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occurred
 in Tanzania and
Guatemala
, the
milk
 consumption in both countries
were
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was
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 reported below 100,000
litres
.
However
,
milk
 distribution in Tanzania successfully
surpass
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surpassed
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 150,000
litres
,
while
 remained
less
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at less
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 than 100,000
litres
 in
Guatemala
 by the end of
period
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the period
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.
On the other hand
,
albeit
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although
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Australians
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Australia
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 seemed to be the second highest country that produced
milk
 among the four nations in 1990, the figures decreased
100,000
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by 100,000
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litres
 in 2000 and had a swift downward until the
production
 only calculated
to
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at
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 9,165,000
litres
 in 2010.
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