The map bellow show the chances that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780,1860 and 2000.

The map bellow show the chances that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780,1860 and 2000.
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The provided maps illustrate information about the changes
of
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Willington
town
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in three different years.
overall
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, it is evident that the
trees
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were
tranformed
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transformed
into
building
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buildings
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and based on
increasing
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number of people, obviously, the
town
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was civilized.
to begin
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1780, There
are
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a river, some
farm lands
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farmlands
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, and
trees
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were
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located
in
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left
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,
center
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, and right sides of
town
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, respectively.
However
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, some changes were carried out in 1860,
such
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as the
town
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got
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more accessible than before by
condtructing
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constructing
the road and bridge.
on the other
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hand
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the number of fields and
trees
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were
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decreased.
nonethelese
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nonetheless
, the houses doubled over almost 1 century. in 2000, by increasing the
homes
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to 500, the
trees
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had been totally gone and changed into
school
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schools
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,
sports
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and sports
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field
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fields
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.
in addition
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, the leisure places,
such
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as
wetland
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wetlands
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for birds, were added.
moreover
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, along the river, a market was made.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, trees with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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