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The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journey made in Great Bristain between 1950 and 2004/5. Summarize the information by selecting and report the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journey made in Great Bristain between 1950 and 2004/5. Summarize the information by selecting and report the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart gives information about the quantity of passenger
trip
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trips
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 by the railway
runned
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run
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 in Great
Bristain
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Britain
 from 1950 to 2004/5. It can be seen that all of
National
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the National
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rail
network
,
London
 Underground and Light
rail
 &
metro
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and metro
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 systems have an increasing trend between 1950 and 2004/5. Speaking of
National
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the National
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rail
network
 and
London
 Underground, during the period 1950 to 1983,
National
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the National
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rail
network
 went up lightly in 1960 (from 1000
milions
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million
 to over 1100
milions
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million
millions
) and
then
 it went down dramatically about under 650
milions
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million
 in 1983,
while
London
 Underground remained stable until 1975 after that it reduced to under 500
milions
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million
 in 1983. In the period 1983 to 2004/5, there
were
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was
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 an increase significantly in the number of National
rail
network
 and
London
 Underground, the former rose to over 1050
milions
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million
millions
 and the latter rose to over 950
milions
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million
millions
. As regards Light
rail
 &
metro
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and metro
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 systems, It was
runned
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run
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 from about 1963 and in 1980
it
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apply
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did not create any
trip
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trips
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. But after that, the Light
rail
 &
metro
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and metro
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 systems increased remarkably to over 150
milions
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million
millions
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rail, network, london, milions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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