The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

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percentage

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the percentage

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citizens

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living in four different Asian region countries from 1970 to 2020 with an

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estimate

of 2030 and 2040

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population

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. In 1970, the population of Malaysia was around 30% but in 2020 it will increase

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the trend in 2040.

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people were between 30% to 50% and till 2020 it faced some downfall during the period. The estimated percentage of people living in urban

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60%, 55% and 50% respectively in 2040.

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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

In some contries more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. what are the reasons for this? is this positive or negative development?

Some people say that what individuals do to protect cannot make a difference, others say that individuals can protect the environment. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. This has led to an increase in the number of elderly people who need care, often putting pressure on families and public services. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people believe that money for education should mainly be spent on better computers while others believe it would be better spent on teachers. Discuss both views and give your opinion.