The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The graph
provide
Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
the
information Correct article usage
apply
of
Change preposition
on
percentage
proportion of Correct article usage
the percentage
the
citizens Correct article usage
apply
were
living in four different Asian region countries from 1970 to 2020 with an Unnecessary verb
apply
esitmate
of 2030 and 2040 Correct your spelling
estimate
also
.
Overall
, the percentage of total
population Correct article usage
the total
Malaysia
city will Change preposition
in Malaysia
have
Verb problem
be
firstrunner
Correct your spelling
first
in
the list Change preposition
on
while
Thailand
will be the
Correct article usage
apply
last
.
In 1970, the population of Malaysia was around 30% but in 2020 it will increase drasctically
and Correct your spelling
drastically
dramatically
risen
Wrong verb form
rise
upto
85% and Correct your spelling
up to
followed
the trend in 2040. Wrong verb form
follow
However
, Indonesia and Thailand
citizens were below the
20% in 1970 but Indonesia surpassed the Correct article usage
apply
Thailand
and Philippines and goes
Wrong verb form
went
upto
to 50% in 2020.
Correct your spelling
up
Further
, Philippines
people were between 30% to 50% and till 2020 it faced some downfall during the period. The estimated percentage of people living in urban Correct article usage
the Philippines
area
in Indonesia, Fix the agreement mistake
areas
Philippines
and Correct article usage
the Philippines
Thailand
will be nearby
60%, 55% and 50% respectively in 2040.Rephrase
near
Submitted by amit.kumar96101 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words thailand with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
▼