The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The graph
provide
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provides
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the
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apply
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information
of
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on
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percentage
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the percentage
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proportion of
the
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apply
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citizens
were
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apply
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living in four different Asian region countries from 1970 to 2020 with an
esitmate
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estimate
of 2030 and 2040
also
.
Overall
, the percentage of
total
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the total
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population
Malaysia
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in Malaysia
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city will
have
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be
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firstrunner
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first
in
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on
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the list
while
Thailand
will be
the
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apply
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last
. In 1970, the population of Malaysia was around 30% but in 2020 it will increase
drasctically
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drastically
dramatically
and
risen
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rise
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upto
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up to
85% and
followed
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follow
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the trend in 2040.
However
, Indonesia and
Thailand
citizens were below
the
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apply
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20% in 1970 but Indonesia surpassed the
Thailand
and Philippines and
goes
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went
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upto
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up
to 50% in 2020.
Further
,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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people were between 30% to 50% and till 2020 it faced some downfall during the period. The estimated percentage of people living in urban
area
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areas
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in Indonesia,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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and
Thailand
will be
nearby
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near
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60%, 55% and 50% respectively in 2040.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words thailand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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