The chart below gives information on the percentage of British People giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British People giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010
The graph displays the
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of funds
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donated by the various age ranges of United Kingdom citizens in percentage
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the
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1990 and 2010. The highest rate of charity was
initially
led by the age range of 36 to 50 by just under 45
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, but
then
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by around 10
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and became 35
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in 2010.
Consequently
, the age range that reached the peak of the chart in 2010 is the United Kingdom society
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51 to 65 by just under 40
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, despite the fact that they were in
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second place in 1990 with 35
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.
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the contrary, the
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ages with the lowest percentage of charity in 1990
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18 to 25 years by just above 15
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,
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it decreased until the
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2010,
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keeping its position at the lowest place
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the chart.
Besides
, the second worst performance is done by the community in their 25 to 35
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started with a decent number of just above 30
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, but
then
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lowering the rate by the
year
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2010 until around 25
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.
Last
, the middle performer is aged more than 65 years with around 30
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in 1990 and increased by just under 5
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at the
year
of 2010.
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