You have recently finished a course and would like to give some feedback to the course organiser. Write a letter to he college where you took the course. In your letter explain what the course was say what you enjoyed about the course suggest how the course could be improved

Dear Sir, Hope

this

letter finds you in good spirits. Actually, I have recently completed my 5 years, Business Accountancy course from your reputed college . As

this

institution is extremely popular in Mumbai, India so, I am obliged to be a student of LPU. Honestly, I extremely enjoyed studying here not only my tutors were really helpful but I

also

learnt social and economic skills at

this

place. I

accede

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agree

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that

along with

the bookish materials, practical knowledge

that is

provided in

this

institute is instrumental for the scholars that help them

in scoring

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score

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better marks.

However

, there is one negative point that I saw

while

studying in

this

college, the number of tutees in one classroom is extremely high and

due to

this

scenario, all the students do not get an equal chance to participate in class discussions.

Therefore

, I would appreciate the management if a limit is set for the number of pupils admitted to one lecture. Yours sincerely, Abjedhuejh

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6 paragraphs

163 words

7.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

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