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Band 4.5

Some people prefer to work for a large company, Others prefer to work for a small company. Which would you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

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These days, business sectors are developing tremendously around the world.
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 some individuals tend to
work
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 for large
size
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 enterprises, others prefer to
work
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 for small
companies
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.
This
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 essay discusses both viewpoints and I would prefer large enterprises because
it
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they
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 provide a high
salary
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 package,
insurance
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 and
status
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.
To begin
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 with, many individuals like to be
workers
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 in a large-scale
company
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 because
this
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company
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 provides a high
salary
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 package depending on educational
qualification
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qualifications
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 as compared to other types of industries.
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, because
workers
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 who
work
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for big
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big
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for big
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comapanies
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companies
 can easily get a loan from
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a bank
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bank
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a bank
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, their civil score is high and their
earning
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earnings
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also
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 is high.
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, large
companies
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 ensure their employee's medical
insurance
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 so that if any accidents
are happened
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happen
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 to
workers
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, the medical
insurance
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 covers all the expenses.
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, working in a big
company
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 not only provides medical and financial benefits but
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 provides
status
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 to the
workers
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.
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, many folks like to
work
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 in a small-scale industry because
this
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 type of enterprise makes the social connection between the
company
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as well as
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 the local people.
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, a construction
company
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 builds a building
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 a tiny enterprise's
workers
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 have a chance to interact with the local residents, and
this
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 is one kind of marketing.
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, a tiny
size
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 organisation gives a chance to learn new skills
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 working because
workers
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 do not have more
work
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 pressure, workload and target achievement,
hence
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, they have to use their free time to learn new skills.
To conclude
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,
although
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 large
size
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 organisation provides more
salary
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, medical
insurance
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 and
status
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 to
workers
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, small scale
size
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companies
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 help to learn new
skill
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skills
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while
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 working and create social bonding between employees and the residents.
However
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, I would prefer
for
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apply
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large
companies
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due to
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because
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it
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they
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 provide more benefits to employees
such
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 as a high
salary
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, medical
insurance
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 and
status
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.

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task achievement
In terms of task achievement, your response addresses the prompt adequately, but to reach a higher score, ensure that your ideas are fully developed and clearly expressed. Use a range of lexical devices to articulate your point more effectively.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, your essay demonstrates some organization and linkage of ideas, but to score higher, work on improving the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. Employ a wider range of cohesive devices to enhance the connectivity of your writing.
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