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writing to this letter to inform you that about tlled left my bag

#bag
Dear sir or madam I am writing
to
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this
 letter to inform you that about
tlled
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tiled
tilled
 left my
bag
in
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on
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 your plane
last
tuesday
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Tuesday
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 date on 2nd of December 2023. I
rimmaing
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remain
 ti my
buyy
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body
buy
 once about arriving the home. I
traved
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travelled
travel
 in your plane
last
tuesday
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Tuesday
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 the date of 2nd of December 2023 and my
tickets
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 number is 26346 and my sit number is 56. I am
siting
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sitting
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 in
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the seconed
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seconed
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second
 row next
in
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 the door. I
puted
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put
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 my
bag
 in the selves behind my
sit
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seat
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. My
bag
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favourite
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 colour is brown and red. My
bag
 brand name is American
turisem
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tourism
. My
bag handlad
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bag's
 colour is black. It is my
person
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personal
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bag
 and so many documents and important files are in the
bag
. My all filed and my
person
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leptop
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laptop
 is on the
bag
. I request
to
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you kindly find my
bag
 and
delivered
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deliver
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to
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it to
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 my address as soon as you find it.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully,
parth
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part
 patel
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coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the letter is weak with several grammatical errors and incoherent sentences that make it difficult to follow. The use of paragraphs seems arbitrary and does not enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriate, although 'Your faithfully' should be corrected to 'Yours faithfully'.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should contain a single idea to ensure the letter is easy to follow. Consider organizing content more logically, with one paragraph explaining the situation, another detailing the bag, and a final one with the request and contact information.
task achievement
The response is on topic, covering the necessary information about losing the bag and providing details; however, the message could be clearer with corrections to grammar and spelling.
task achievement
The tone is largely suitable for a formal letter, but the language needs to be more precise and formal to more effectively communicate the urgency and importance of the situation.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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