Advertising is becoming more and more common in everyday life. Is it a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, our daily lives are filled with
commercials
, there are more advertisements
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on
tv
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programs, they are on the side of vehicles, on the walls of buildings and even
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regularly before
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youtube
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videos. Personally, I firmly believe excessive advertising
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a negative impact on our society, the following content will outline the reasons. The colourful and attractive
commercials
could become a potential security issue.
While
driving on the roads, drivers can see plenty of them which are printed on the sides of the vehicles
such
as buses,
taxi
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and trucks.
This
might be a risky condition,
for example
, drivers could easily be distracted by them when passing
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intersection or making
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U turn
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.
As a result
, traffic accidents might occur. In my opinion, in order to maintain
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road safety, the government should decrease the distractions which might possibly lead to accidents.
On the other hand
, excessive advertising could
also
distract
people
from crucial information or events. Generally, the content of
commercials
includes promoting products, streaming series or popular movies.
While
this
information potentially makes
people
switch to entertaining or shopping channels,
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people
will focus on
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undergoing political events, newly
lauched
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launched
policies and some international news.
For instance
, the
annually
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election in Taiwan will mainly be affected by the enormous amount of
commercials
which distract public attention
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politics. In conclusion, the distracting content of the excessive advertising could potentially contributes to road safety issue and loss public attention on politics. Personally, I think advertising should be limited for
people
to focus on something which is more vital.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • promote
  • economic growth
  • provide information
  • awareness
  • job opportunities
  • manipulative
  • misleading
  • consumerism
  • materialism
  • invade
  • personal space
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