9/1 The chart below compare the number of people per household* in the UK in 1981 and 2001.

9/1 The chart below compare the number of people per household* in the UK in 1981 and 2001.
The chart illustrates the changed number of family members in each family in
UK
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the UK
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between 1981 and 2001.
Overall
, the data reveals
the
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a
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decreasing trend of
families
which have more than 2
people
, and
the
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smaller size
families
become
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became
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more common in 2001.
Firstly
, the percentage of
families
which had 3, 4, 5 and 6
people
reduced dramatically. The former three were 20, 18 and 8
percentage
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in 1981, and they had
range
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a range
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of decrease between 2 and 3,
therefore
, they became 17, 15 and 6 respectively.
In addition
, the
families
were
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constructed by 6
people
suffered the highest decrease, it dropped from 6 to 2 over the period.
In contrast
, the
families
built by 1 or 2
people
had a significant enhancement in 2001. Both of them increased, the increase
were
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9 percent which was the highest increase for the former and 3 percent for the latter. Their percentage were 26 and 34 in 2001, the total number of these two occupied
three-fifth
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three-fifths
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of the family in the UK.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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