9/1 The chart below compare the number of people per household* in the UK in 1981 and 2001.

The chart illustrates the changed number of family members in each family in

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the UK

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between 1981 and 2001.

Overall

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, the data reveals

the

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decreasing trend of

families

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which have more than 2

people

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, and

the

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apply

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smaller size

families

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become

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became

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more common in 2001.

Firstly

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, the percentage of

families

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which had 3, 4, 5 and 6

people

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reduced dramatically. The former three were 20, 18 and 8

percentage

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per cent

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in 1981, and they had

range

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a range

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of decrease between 2 and 3,

therefore

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, they became 17, 15 and 6 respectively.

In addition

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, the

families

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were

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apply

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constructed by 6

people

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suffered the highest decrease, it dropped from 6 to 2 over the period.

In contrast

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, the

families

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built by 1 or 2

people

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had a significant enhancement in 2001. Both of them increased, the increase

were

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was

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9 percent which was the highest increase for the former and 3 percent for the latter. Their percentage were 26 and 34 in 2001, the total number of these two occupied

three-fifth

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three-fifths

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of the family in the UK.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words families, people with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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170 words

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