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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast-food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast-food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
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The bar chart compares the percentage of the USA residents, who went to order fast
food
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 restaurants over a decade in three separate
years
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.
Overall
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, it was more common for Americans to eat fast
food
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 once or twice a week in 2013,
while
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 the highest proportion of consumers in 2003 and 2006 ate once a week.
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, in all the
years
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 shown in question, the lowest number of
people
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 every single day ate in fast
food
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 restaurants. Looking at the details, less than 5% of
people
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 ate fast
food
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 in all three
years
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although
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 the figure for year 2003 was slightly higher than those in other
years
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. In 2006,
people
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 tended to eat fast
food
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 at least once or several times a week, more than in 2003 and 2013.
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, about 25% of the USA habitants consumed fast
food
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 once or twice a month, which was lower than those in 2003 and 2013 at approximately one-third of the population.
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, nearly 15% of
people
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 preferred to eat fast
food
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 rarely in 2006 and 2013;
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, the proportion of
people
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 in 2003 was not quite as high at 13%.
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just similar to those who ordered fast
food
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 every day, the percentage of Americans who never consumed fast
food
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 was at 5% and lower.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, years, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast-food consumption
  • frequently
  • economic downturn
  • age demographics
  • lifestyles
  • health consciousness
  • advertising campaigns
  • affordable dining
  • healthier alternatives
  • consumer habits
  • proliferation
  • trend analysis
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