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There is an increasing trend around the wprld of married couples deciding not to have children.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for the couples who decide to do thid.

#trend #wprld #couples #children #thid
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An increase in
a
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 number of married
couples
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 in and around the world,
they
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and they
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 have decided to not have
children
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.Nowadays, it is been trending not to have
childrenchildren
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children
.It
iis
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is
 fashionable.
Overall
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,the
couples
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 are getting married soon and planning not to have
a
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children
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children
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 because of their own problems.
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we would elaborate on the above statement.A rise in married
couples
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 at every age leads to some different advantages and disadvantages too.The advantages of getting married at the age of 23 for females and 27 for males is mandatory for every citizen in the world.Even it is good to get married at an early age for
the
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both men and women. They will better
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between
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themselves.
Then
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 it builds
them
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their
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 confidence to lead their
life
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 happily and successfully.The
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couples
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 has a good relationship
between
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that does not lead to any financial problems, or
any
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struggles and they are able to plan for a
baby
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 .After giving birth to a new
baby
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 their
life
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 would be happy in every case, the
baby
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 will bring happiness to their family. So,there won't be any burden for them to run a
life
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.
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, there are many
couples
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 deciding not to have
children
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.It depends upon the family background or financial problems they have.Because
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this
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of this
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 reason many
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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couples
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 decide not a have
children
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this
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 would be another burden for them to carry
along with
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 their lives.It is better to have
a
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children
a child
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children
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 for their own lives,after giving birth to a
baby
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 they can decide on their
the
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apply
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life
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 and work on it.Every financial burden
and
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etc will be overcome by the new
baby
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.
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At
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In
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 the end,we would suggest that giving birth to
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baby
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a baby
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 is good for their own
life
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. It will lead our
life
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 happily and encourage us to do every work with happy faces.It is easy to work on our goals to achieve in our
life
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.
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Coherence and Cohesion
The essay lacks a clear structure, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. It's essential to organize the essay to present a clear argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
The main points are not well-developed and lack supporting details. Each main point should be elaborated with explanations and relevant examples.
Task Achievement
The essay does not address the advantages and disadvantages effectively. Make sure to discuss both sides of the argument in detail.
Lexical Resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary and sentence structures to express ideas more precisely and vary the language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Work on grammar and punctuation to avoid errors that may confuse the reader and detract from the overall quality of the essay.

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