The graph shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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The line graph illustrates and compares the annual quantity of closed stores and that of new ones in a particular nation from 2011 and 2018.
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, both shops which were launched and
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which stopped operating underwent a downward trend over the examined period.
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, the latter was usually more than the prior. Regarding the first 4 years, there was a fluctuation in the number of closed shops between 6000 in 2001 and just over 7000 in 2014. Meanwhile, in the first year, the figure for opening shops dived from the highest point of 8000 to nearly half of its, being surpassed by the aforementioned. It was followed by a considerable 2000 increase until 2014. Turning to the remaining time, closures witnessed
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dive to hit the lowest point of well under 1000 in 2015. At the same time, the other declined to 4000, which was followed by
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stability in the next two years before decreasing to the ending point of around 3000. Meanwhile, in 2016, the prior bounced back to approximately 5000, which outnumbers the openings, and
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it reached a plateau from 2016 onwards.
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Vocabulary: The word "dived" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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