WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
Some individuals say that the primary environmental issue is the extinction of many plants and
animals
, while
others argue that there are more important environmental problems
. This
essay will examine both perspectives and present the view that species
are the main reason to protect the environment.
On one hand, losing animals
and plants may affect the ecology for many reasons. One main reason is that trees and plants are air purified
because they emit oxygen and absorb carbon dioxide. Add a hyphen
air-purified
As a result
, the pollution will be reduced. Furthermore
, animals
have the power to help in plant growth by transferring their litter to the soil. In addition
, some types of animals
can clean the area around them such
as crows, they have a habit of collecting plastic bags or any shining materials. For example
, in Oxford, which is popular for raising cows, they take the cow's waste and use it as a
manure for the trees which Correct article usage
apply
resulted
in a green and clean city. I believeWrong verb form
results
,
some specific Remove the comma
apply
species
would help to solve many environmental issues and provide a friendly environment.
On the other hand
, some people say that there are more significant environmental problems
. One of the problems
is the pollution of cars
. Cars
produce a lot of smoke that impacts the air and this
issue should be solved by replacing fuel cars
with electronic cars
to protect the world. For instance
, the vehicles company Tesla, created a smart electronic car to avoid pollution. In my opinion, solving these problems
might help although
not the same as finding a solution to species
extinctions.
To sum up
, while
some may express concern about various environmental issues, preserving biodiversity should be the main focus. Protecting the species
from extinction might help to provide a friendly environment.Submitted by Mahaa_sh on
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the essay has a clear introduction with a thesis statement, a logical progression throughout the body paragraphs, and a conclusive summary. The introduction and conclusion were present, but a clearer thesis statement is needed to direct the essay more effectively.
coherence cohesion
Develop paragraphs with clear main ideas, supported by appropriate explanations, and specific examples. While you provided examples, they could be better explained and directly linked to the central argument of each paragraph.
task achievement
The response must fully address all parts of the task. The opinion was mentioned, but it needs to be more thoroughly analyzed and supported throughout the essay. Include a more balanced discussion of both views before expressing your own.
coherence cohesion
Include a wider range of cohesive devices and paragraphing techniques, ensuring the logical progression of ideas. Your essay can benefit from more varied and sophisticated linking words and phrases.
task achievement
Generate ideas that are relevant and fully extended, and that relate more directly to the question. Use specific examples consistently to back up your points.
task achievement
Stay focused on the prompt throughout the essay. Avoid diverging into related—but not directly relevant—topics.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?
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