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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctors. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

People today tend to
having
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an alternative prescriptions
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an alternative prescription
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 to deal with various health issues
instead
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 of going to a hospital,
getting
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or getting
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 an examination from the experts. I advocate
this
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 as a negative alteration which can lead to a
mal-practice
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malpractice
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medicines
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of medicines
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 and treatments.
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 with the medicines, state-of-the-art technology
have
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 brought numerous drugs ranging from herbals to artificials.
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, not all have been proven safe in curing patients as there
are
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is
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 no an adequate trial
how
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of how
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 they
workk
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work
. If societies consume
this
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 sort of medicine only based on advertisements, adverse problems could stem from
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this
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these
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 unproved drugs,
for instance
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an
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organ damage.
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,
beside of
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 the drugs,
a
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apply
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mal-practice could
also
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witness
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 in a
treatments
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treatment
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 aspect, precipitating more serious
issue
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issues
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such
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 as death. When
uprofessional
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professional
unprofessional
 individuals take action to lessen the symptoms of disease, the outcome could be worst. In my experience, I ever went to a traditional clinic in order to cure my stomachache by having
acupunturs
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acupuncture
. After three days, my stomach was still not better, followed by my whole body which
feel
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 weaker. Based on that fact, preferring to go to the doctor
instead
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 of the unqualification examiner is the best way to conquer
the
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apply
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health problems. In conclusion, amid the dichotomy conviction about whether visiting
doctor
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a doctor
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 to get
a
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apply
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proper medicine and treatment is a good choice or not, I assert that
this
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 is a negative change as acquiring a valid
diagnose
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diagnosis
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 from the experts is necessary in
the
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apply
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health matters.
Although
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 the charge
of
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to
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 doctor is
in a high-cost
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, it is worth
as
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it as
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 societies could
recovery
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recover
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 their body well.

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task achievement
Ensure that your essay maintains a clear position throughout in response to the question asked. Your position should be evident in each paragraph and conclusion.
task achievement
Address all aspects of the task, including why you deem the development negative and provide a balanced analysis or a consistent argument. Flesh out your ideas with more specific examples, studies, or statistics where applicable.
coherence and cohesion
Develop logical paragraphs with clear and concise main ideas. Each paragraph should flow smoothly to the next. Use a range of linking devices to connect your ideas appropriately.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid spelling errors and try not to repeat errors. Write the complete form of words, avoiding informal contractions, and ensure the correct use of punctuation.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicine
  • conventional medicine
  • holistic approach
  • personalized care
  • side effects
  • regulation
  • evidence-based
  • self-care
  • empowerment
  • holistic health centers
  • complementary treatments
  • dissatisfaction
  • scientific evidence
  • appropriate treatment
  • cultural beliefs
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