Some people belive that too many resources and attention are devoted to the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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an adverse hurdles

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to jungle

life

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birds

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as wild

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life protection

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,and education among citizens. I concur with

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of wild

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to save the

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were killed

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a long time for pleasure and food. Which can cause

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of many spices.

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couple of years number of

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drastically

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the fines and legal action taken by public authorities.

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this

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are in every city, where

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,and parrots are kept

securly

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trained employees.

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great

intitative

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leads to safe shelter and food for all those wild

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inhabitants

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their

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role in educating people. Advertisements are

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which state the importance of

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chain

broken

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what are the negative effects to our environment. Schools

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teach

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the benefits of

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and

birds

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. eventually, the purpose

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knowledge is handled by every

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only to maintain a balance in

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a higher extent many

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already gone but I firmly agree that, there are great

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initiatives

taken by

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and media whose main motive

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spread

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education to protect our jungle.

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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279 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

conservation
biodiversity
ecosystem
extinction
wildlife tourism
resource allocation
habitats
sustainable development
environmental education
charismatic species
international collaboration
invasive species
poaching
endangered/threatened
conservation efforts
wildlife management
conservation biology
ecological balance
species preservation
wildlife sanctuary
animal welfare
ecotourism
genetic diversity
natural heritage

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Some people belive that too many resources and attention are devoted to the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are important as to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is common nowadays for each member of the family to have their own piece of modern technology. Some people think this will lead to a breakdown in family relationships and communication. To what extent do you agree?

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantage of driverless vehicles outweight disadvantages?