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Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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In modern society, International enterprises are rising at
gigantic
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 rate in most developing nations. There are various advantages and disadvantages behind
this
 scenario, I will explicate those in upcoming paragraphs with suitable examples and
thus
 will lead to a logical conclusion as well.
To begin
 with the benefits and most prominent one is that expansion of multinational industries is extremely significant because it offers a wide range of products from worldwide under one roof.
For instance
, Apple is a U.S. company and Samsung is a Korean company but the products of both enterprises are available to the Indian people in Indian markets.
Furthermore
, the expansion of business across the world helps in the growth of the gross domestic product of the exporting nation by earning foreign exchange
along with
this
, it is
also
 helpful in making a brand name worldwide.
Likewise
, Coca-Cola is an American company popular all over the globe and is earning millions and trillions of money every year
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India is the biggest importer of Coca-Cola
Besides
, local marketers are incurring huge losses because the masses do not like local products over branded items
therefore
, they need to shut down their firms and are jobless.
Hence
, it is apparent that there are various cons of multinational companies in developing countries.
To conclude
,
according to
 the matrimonals aforementioned above one can reach logical results that the benefits on international businesses in underdeveloped areas are instrumental indeed. But, its potential drawbacks should not overlooked either.
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You have attempted to address the question by discussing both advantages and disadvantages of multinational companies in developing countries. However, your main points could be better developed with more relevant examples, and defined arguments. Ensure that every point you introduce is fully explained and supported with clear examples or evidence.
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Your essay shows some level of organization with an introduction and conclusion, but the logical structure can be improved. Make sure that each new idea follows logically from the previous one and that you use clear topic sentences to introduce each paragraph. Linking words and transition phrases can help in creating a more coherent flow of ideas throughout the essay.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Multinational corporations (MNCs)
  • Foreign direct investment (FDI)
  • Developing economies
  • Infrastructure development
  • Capacity building
  • Cultural diversity
  • Sustainability
  • Corporate social responsibility (CSR)
  • Technological transfer
  • Economic disparity
  • Market saturation
  • Brain drain
  • Indigenous industries
  • Expatriate management
  • Trade imbalance
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