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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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The table illustrates how many proportions of expenditure, spending in three different
categories
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 in
Ireland
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, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and
Turkey
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 in 2002.
Overall
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,
Turkey
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 and
Ireland
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 lead the largest
number
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 of consumerism in
Food
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the Food
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 and Beverages
categories
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,
while
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leisure
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the leisure
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 / education group were the least popular among
three
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the three
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categories
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. A third of
total
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the total
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 food, drinks, and tobacco
categories
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 were spent by
Turkey
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, being the largest among others.
This
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number
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 is followed by
Ireland
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 with 28,91 % of expenditure spending on Food, drinks and tobacco,
while
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 the remaining countries only experienced the lowest
number
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 below 20% in the same
categories
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.
On the other hand
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, Italy was the largest market in clothing and footwear products with the
number
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 of consumerism at 9 %, compared with
Turkey
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, Spain, and
Ireland
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 at around 6%.
Although
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Turkey
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also
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consumed
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spent
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 more expense in leisure and education,
this
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 group got the lowest percentage below 5 % in all countries.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words categories, ireland, turkey, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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