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The bar chart provides information about how often people in the USA spent ate fast food from 2003 to 2013.

The bar chart provides information about how often people in the USA spent ate fast food from 2003 to 2013.
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The presented graph describes data about the frequency of eating fast
food
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 among people in the USA. The data was observed from 2003 to 2013 and categorized into six categories,
such
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 as every day, several times a week, once a week, once or twice a month, a few times a year, and never.
Overall
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, it is evident that most individuals in the country ate junk
food
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 once a week from 2003 to 2006. Only in 2013, the majority of people ate at fast
food
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 restaurants once or twice a month.
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, it was observed that only a tiny fraction of individuals ate fast
food
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 every day over those periods, contributing only less than 5% of the total sample. Upon detailed observation, it was noticed that the number of people who never tried fast
food
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 was relatively stagnant with around 4% contribution.
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, there was a fluctuation in the number of individuals eating at the fast
food
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 chain once or twice a month, starting with around 30% of the sample in 2003
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 dropping significantly to 25% in 2006 and spiking to almost 35% in 2013.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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