You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

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Dear Sir or Madame, I am writing

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letter to inform you of my order from your shop, I need to buy several electrical goods at yours. I would be grateful if you were that

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thing, I find in yours, as you know some shops cannot afford these things, I need to buy them from you or if you would over there my request from another place

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I will pay for you. If you don't mind, I need you to tell me the price because my budget is limited. So, I need to prepare the money early. when you agree to my order tell me please about the price and how and how long my order takes time because I am so fast to receive them and use them and I don't have more time if they

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late. All my request is pretty crucial and essential, to be honest. I look forward to receiving your response, and I thank you for helping me. Yours faithfully, Monirah Mohammad

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coherence cohesion

Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to improve clarity.

task achievement

Work on a more appropriate formal tone for the tasks which require writing to a business or formal institution.

task achievement

Clearly state the specific items you wish to purchase and use clear and concise language to communicate with the recipient.

coherence cohesion

Strive to use accurate and varied sentence structure to convey your requests more effectively.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

171 words

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You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Nowadays it is possibe to use computers and moblie phones for automatic language translation, and there is no need for human translators and interpreters. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The mass media, such as TV, radio and newspapers, have an influence on people, particularly on younger generations. It plays a pivotal role in shaping the opinions of people, especially teenagers and young people. To what extent do you agree with this? Please give examples.

More and more people are shifting to a plant-based diet. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?