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The graph shows average house prices in countries from 2007 to 2014.

The graph shows average house prices in countries from 2007 to 2014.
#house #prices #countries
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The line chart provides data about how much money was spent on living a house accommodation in three countries between 1997 and 2014. Units are measured in millions of dollars.
Overall
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, it is evident that there was a significant increase in all countries,
however
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, A county witnessed a noticeable growth over the period.
Moreover
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, it is
also
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 worth noting that C
country
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 house prices were cheaper than others during the time. In detail,
three
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the three
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 countries represented roughly the same price just above $ 100
thousand
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 in 1997. Afterwards, A county reached a small climb in the space of 4 years (1997-2000).
Besides
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 that, there was a dramatic rise in house prices to $500
thousand
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 from 2000 to 2003 before declining to just under $500K in 2006.
However
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, it went up to nearly $600K
at the end
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 of the period. Plausible as
this
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 seems,
in particular
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, note that b
country
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 experienced some fluctuations, particularly, until 2005,
there
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when there
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 was
substantial
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a substantial
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 jump to just up $300K. After decreasing to $250K in 2008,
this
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country
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 grew to $500
thousand
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 in 2010 and remained unchanged
during
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for
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 4 years.
Furthermore
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, it can be seen that C
country
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 rose gradually to $250K till 2006.
Last
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 but not least,
this
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 figure for C
country
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 accounted for $250
thousand
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 in 2014 after decreasing to $200K in 2008.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words country, thousand, k with synonyms.
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