You are interested in attending a training course abroad but require financial support to do so. Write a letter to the education department requesting financial assistance.

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Dear Sir, I hope

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letter finds you well. My name is Aayush Chappu, and I am currently studying in the third semester of

bachelor’s

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my bachelor’s

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in business administration at your university. I am writing

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letter to request the financial assistance provided by our institute to the students having

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average GPA of 3.5 out of 4, and my combined GPA of two semesters is 3.8. As you are aware

that

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apply

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the university allows students to enrol in

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apply

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practical training courses

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apply

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abroad and, I am very interested in attending

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8-weeks

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business analytics training course offered by the University of Toronto. Since

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program

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teaches

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data analytics by using real data sets of Canadian businesses, it will help me a lot in learning applied data analytical skills.

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, the tuition fee for

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program

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is very high, and it is impossible for my parents to afford it. Though I can apply for a student loan, my application will surely be rejected as I

already taken

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a student loan for my current

program

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, I am kindly requesting you approve my application for

financial

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the financial

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assistance

program

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. I would appreciate your positive response. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Aayush

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Enhancement

Consider providing specific examples of how the training will benefit your future career, to enhance the persuasiveness of your request.

Introduction

You've effectively introduced yourself and your academic standing, which establishes credibility.

Topic Explanation

You clearly explained your interest and the importance of the training course.

Request Articulation

Successfully made a polite request for financial assistance, stating the reasons why it's needed.

Tone

The letter maintains a suitable formal tone throughout, appropriate for the context.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

204 words

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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familier with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your opinion.

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