WRITE A LETTERR TO COMMUNITY HEALTH NURSE

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I am writing to refer
Martin
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Wison who is requiring your continued
care
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and urgent attention. Now he is set to
discharged
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be discharged
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into your
care
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.
Martin
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was presented to our
care
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on 13
october
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October
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with attempted suicide following
overdose
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an overdose
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of Mogodol. On admission , he was weak and depressed. He was prescribed Lovan 2oomg. During
hopitalization
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hospitalization
hospitalisation
, he was diagnosed with type 2 diabetes
for
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that health education
given
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was given
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on diet and oral medication. Now, he is using
wheelchair
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a wheelchair
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from 20\10. Currently, he has
poor
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a poor
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appetite and
physically
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is physically
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unfit to do his activities.
Martin
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was a retired bookkeeper and lives with his wife. He has had a habit of heavy smoker and
social
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a social
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drinker. He was depressed
due to
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gambling
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his gambling
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addiction. He
was
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started
the
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gambling 2 years ago
as a result
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he lost his friend and has lost a lot of his money including superannuation funds and in
dept
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debt
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. After that, he wishes to overcome addiction. He has had a history of bronchitis ,
psoriasis
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and psoriasis
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and
underweight
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is underweight
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. I would highly appreciate it if you could take over
of
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Martin
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in your
care
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. kindly encourage him to maintain his medicine routine as the SSRI is established. Assist and encourage him to join
gambling
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a gambling
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addiction group. Kindly help him to make an appointment with
apsychologist
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a psychologist
psychologist
and
the
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a
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social worker for gambling
addition
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addiction
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therapy. If you have any queries, don't hesitate to contact me. Yours sincerely Nurse
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph presents a clear main idea and stays focused on that idea, avoiding multiple topics within the same paragraph.
Coherence and Cohesion
It is important to maintain a logical flow and clear connection between the paragraphs and ideas. Use a variety of coherent linking devices to enhance the flow of the letter.
Task Achievement
A suitable writing tone is important for task achievement; try to maintain a formal and polite tone consistently throughout the letter. Address the recipient appropriately and sign off the letter formally.
Task Achievement
To fully achieve the task, all elements of the prompt must be addressed. Ensure that each aspect of the request regarding care is mentioned clearly and that the main purpose of the letter is fulfilled.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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