The diagrams show the structure of solar panel and its use.

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The structure of solar

panel

Fix the agreement mistake

panels

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and

its

Correct pronoun usage

their

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usage

Correct subject-verb agreement

are

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illustrated in the picture.

Overall

, there are two types of solar

panel

systems including heating

air

and heating

water

with transparent top which absorbs

sun

rays

. These heating facilities have almost similar structures, with

inlet

Correct article usage

an inlet

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and

Correct word choice

apply

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outlet

and main box, regardless of

water

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the water

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pipe

Unnecessary verb

apply

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in the solar

panel

to heat

water

compared

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apply

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another

Correct quantifier usage

apply

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one

Correct pronoun usage

apply

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First,

the solar

panel

to heating

air

facility absorbs

sun

rays

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transparent

Correct article usage

a transparent

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top with

inlet

Correct article usage

an inlet

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outlet

, and main box. Cool

air

is transferred through the

inlet

into

box

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the box

a box

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, and gathered

air

is heated by

sun

rays

through

transparent

Correct article usage

a transparent

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top, and

then

warm

air

goes out by

outlet

Second,

the heating

water

system is nearly

same

Correct article usage

the same

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, but it has

water

Correct article usage

a water

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pipe which transfers

water

. Cool

water

goes into

pipe

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the pipe

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through

inlet

Add an article

the inlet

an inlet

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, and it is heated by

sun

rays

with heat energy and goes out by

outlet

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words panel, air, water, sun, rays, inlet, outlet with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

151 words

4.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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