Fast food is becoming a part of people's daily life everwhere, and this has had negative effects on our lifestyle and diet. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is common to become a fast-
food
people
day to day-to-day lifestyle everywhere, and it has negative consequences for their lifestyle and diet. I totally agree with and I will discuss
this
and I give you my opinions. On the one hand, nowadays fast
food
become very popular because these days
people
are very busy earning money.
As a result
, they do not have time to take
food
with family.
For example
, if someone goes to work for the office they don't have to spend time to come for lunch.
As a result
, the Oder some fast
food
like a restaurant. For the more, someone who does not care that Heath
food
. They always love to eat outside because it is very delicious more than homemade
food
.
For example
, fast
food
is very delicious because it is very sugary and oily. In my opinion, if it eats over becomes a negative
an
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effect like a non-communicable disease.
For instance
, adiabatic, cholesterol, and Pressure because they are careless about their
food
they have to take medicine lifetime.
On the other hand
, nowadays very forums fast
food
because they can Oder to easier. These days delivery services are very fast.
As a result
,
people
are addicted to it.
for example
, these days pizza shops are everywhere.
people
can very easily order.
Although
people
are addicted to fast
food
day by day. In conclusion, in my opinion
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fast
food
become a
people
part of life. because it is an easier lifestyle.but it negative
affect
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like a
non communicated
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dishes
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.
People
are suffering for lifetimes and drink medicine for a lifetime.
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Ensure that the introduction adequately paraphrases the task question and clearly presents your opinion on the topic. The conclusion should summarize the main points and restate your position without introducing new information.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • moreover
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  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ubiquitous
  • Convenience
  • Nutrition
  • Obesity epidemic
  • Lifestyle diseases
  • Processed foods
  • Caloric intake
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Health implications
  • Dietary patterns
  • Globalization of diet
  • Health-conscious
  • Regulatory measures
  • Consumer behavior
  • Marketing strategies
  • Junk food
  • Preventive healthcare
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