In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want without paying on the Internet. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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technology is more welcomed
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society
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conventional way.
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people find it more efficient to work with modern things rather than
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, including the digitalization of literacy.
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statements are based on several reasons that will be discussed below. First and foremost, printed reading materials are the reason why many
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of
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forest
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going through
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deforestation
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global warming. Some governments are already
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this
problem with
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book
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where people can read the exact same readings on their devices without needing to cut the trees to make paper. More than that, the materials on the internet are more diverse and have more updated sources than the printed ones.
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every single day rather than the ones that are already printed
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cannot be refreshed.
Moreover
, electronic
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, or a section of
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as
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online library,
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more accessible to many
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of communities.
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amount of money on information they need to know. More than that,
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society
as they
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learn
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without
any
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.
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, the transmission from
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books or
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to modernization
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it
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is beneficial globally.
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mankind.
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decade where everything is dependent only on one gadget to make lives easier. With
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books trend will likely decrease as some advancement
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happenned
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happens
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