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The bar chart below shows numbers of seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the Gormez Straits from 2006 to 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows numbers of seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the Gormez Straits from 2006 to 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides data about
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 of
seals
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whales
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dolphins
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 recorded in the Gormez Straits from 2006 to 2018.
Overall
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, the highest
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whales
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dolphins
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 recorded in the Gormez Straits was in 2018. As can clearly be seen,
initially
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 the
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seals
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 was more than 40, the
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whales
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 was more than 20 and the
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dolphins
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 was roughly 18.
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, in 2010 the
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 decreased to approximately 25 percent. The
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 increased a little,
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 the
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dolphins
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 rose from 18 to approximately 21. In 2014 the
numbers
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 of
seals
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dolphins
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 rose and became more than 30,
however
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, the
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whales
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 decreased. The
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whales
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 was a little more than 20. In the final
year
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 the
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seals
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whales
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 and
dolphins
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 recorded in the Gormez Straits increased. In 2018 the
number
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whales
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 is a little less than 30. The
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seals
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 is more or less 45 and the
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dolphins
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 is more than 50. In 2018 the lowest
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 the highest
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 had
dolphins
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, seals, whales, dolphins with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 15 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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