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More and more business meetings and business training have taken place on the Internet. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

#business #meetings #place #internet #development
In
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 world, conducting training online is
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a normal practice. Most organizations are moving towards
hybrid
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 work culture.
However
,
this
 norm has both pros and cons. In my opinion, there are some major factors which have overcome the disadvantages. In my forthcoming
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i
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 will discuss whether
this
 activity has overcome the drawbacks. To commence with, companies do not have to spend too much when it comes to
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.
Emplyees
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Employees
 or other members can attend these
meeting
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meetings
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 from the comfort of their homes or anywhere.
Therefore
, online meetings
cuts
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 off almost half of the cost for the organizations. These meetups are
cosidered
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considered
 good options for those
memebers
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members
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lives
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 in far areas. They do not have to travel long for the meetings.
On the other hand
, some people face difficulties
while
 attending online workshops. In some under-developed or developing countries;
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 of internet resources can cause serious
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 for some people
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For instance
,
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a person
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person
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people
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 living in
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remote areas will not
able
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 to attend
these business workshop
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this business workshop
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 because of connectivity
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issues
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. Electricity
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 can
also
 be
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 as a major problem in those areas.
To sum up
, online trainings have both flaws and strengths. But with modern technology and recent development advantages of
this
 development have truly
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 the disadvantages. For that reason, businesses are now conducting more online
trainings
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training
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 than physical.
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coherence cohesion
You have structured the essay with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which meets the basic requirements. However, the logical flow can be enhanced by presenting ideas in a more organized manner, using more sophisticated linking devices, and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear central topic.
task achievement
Your response addresses the task by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of online business meetings and training. Nevertheless, you could improve by further expanding on the ideas presented with more detailed examples and by consistently offering a clear opinion throughout the essay. This will demonstrate a more comprehensive understanding of the topic and fulfill the task more completely.

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