The maps below show the centre of a small town called (slip as it is now, and plans for its development.
The maps illustrate
Ilsip
town centre now, and the planned development of it in the future.
Correct article usage
the Ilsip
Overall
, it can be seen that modern facilities are planned to be built and new housing to be constructed.
Currently, the main road
expands from east to west and it has two small lines, going to the school and the park. Two rows of shops are located nearby to the main line. In the south of this
, two housing facilities are located. Also
, the countryside is located in the north of the town.
According to
the planned layout, the main road
will be replaced by pedestrian pavement and the road
will be expanded to the north and the south bypassing the modern facilities of the city, like the shopping centre, the bus station, the car park and shops. Also
, new housing constructions will be built in the south-east and the north-east sides of the shops. In addition
, new
Correct article usage
a new
one
Correct pronoun usage
apply
road
will be connecting new housing and the main road
. Nevertheless
, the school will stay in the same place.Submitted by dnm.best on
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