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The maps below show a cafe 10 years ago, 5 years ago and now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a cafe 10 years ago, 5 years ago and now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The three given maps demonstrate changes to the layout of a café over a decade.
Overall
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,
while
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 the café has been renovated over time, the most significant moderations have taken place in the
last
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 5 years, with considerable addition of facilities. The café was originally planned to have eight tables in the centre and two
terraces
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 near the entrance. A cash desk was located next to one of the
terraces
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,
whereas
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 the food preparation area and restrooms were at the back of the building.
While
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 the café’s layout remained mostly unchanged, a table was added to each of the
terraces
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 5 years later. The café saw the most substantial changes over the
last
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 5 years.
Firstly
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, two more tables have been added to the
terraces
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, necessitating their expansion.
Furthermore
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, the formerly circular tables have been replaced by long, rectangular ones to accommodate larger groups of customers.
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, a counter has been erected between the existing cash desk and the toilets.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words café, terraces with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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