Some people believe that violent films are bad for you and encourage people to be violent. Others argue that violence and films are unrelated because violence existed before films. Which of these opinions do you agree with, and to what extent do you agree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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It is true that some

people

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that violent

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should be cancelled because of the bad impact, and others think that these

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are not bad

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because

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existed before it. Personally, I agree that violent

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can not make

people

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violent. On the one hand, sometimes violent

films

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can be too cruel or even unrealistic and children, for

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, might be attracted by it. They do not understand anything in

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world and if parents

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not explain to them that

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is bad, they can copy

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type of

behavior

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and use it in real life. Even some of the adult

people

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are not be

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able to watch these

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due to

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the bad sleep after that.

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have

right

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to watch violent

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for to not watch

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they do not want to, but all of them must understand that

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is wrong.

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, there are some cases when

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start to act

cruel

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in real life.

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films

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about real

violence

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that keep happening in the world

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to be seen.

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should know about what happens and

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is why directors make

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type of

movies

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. Violent

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also

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can teach children that it is bad and make

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society even worse. Obviously, not all kids will think about it right, but adults should just

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talk with them, because

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it from children is not good for them. Every person can be scared, and it is

normal

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reaction, but everyone should know about

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that existed before

this

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films

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. In conclusion, I agree with

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that

violence

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existed before

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and

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cannot be affected by it

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because

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this type

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these types

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of movies are

filming

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to teach

people

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how they

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are

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not allowed to act.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

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