Many small business are being forced to close because they are unable compete with multinational corporation? what problems does this cause and how can problems be solved?

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surprising that the
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issue
of several new
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businesses
in the contemporary days are being obliged to close their door for the reason that their
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incapable
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with
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international
companys
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. there are some solutions which should be implemented.
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most
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people
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when
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finished
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they want to
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your
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own
company
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business
,
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it turns out that
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get
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oversaturated
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don't
have enough found to support their
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comparison
with a big
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to have a
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the other side individuals look for working generally in
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multinational companies because they know that in a big corporation, they
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the opportunity to
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their soft and hards skills and may be can
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receive
an
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offer
to work indeterminade,
while
this
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opportunity
in a small
comany
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company
it is difficult to happen
also
the salaries in a small
business
it is not good enough in the reason that, the
company
need to save money for themselves to improve and growth the interprise in the future.
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inssues
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issues
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help of the
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implementing a project for
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micro-industry. Decrease the fee tax for a recent
company
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can
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the
company
without
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that probably one day will be forced to close the door,
therefore
givin
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giving
to
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company
more time in the
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the other hand, the
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government
can encourage the
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candidates to work in a small
business
giving them benefits. In conclusion, a lot of small
enterprise
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need to close the door,
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the reason that they can not fight with the
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older
one
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. To
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resolve
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issue
the
governement
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government
can apply policies to help the small companies in the
market
.
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