The maps show a shopping centre in 1985 and in 2005.

The maps show a shopping centre in 1985 and in 2005.
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The given maps portray the changes made to a shopping
center
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between 1982 and 2012. Generally speaking, the building itself has been expanded in order to hold more stores. Some stores have been relocated
while
other areas of the old layout have been completely removed. Outdoors, the lake that used to be just to the left of the entrance was removed in order to extend the shopping
center
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building and construct a
biger
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furniture retail shop
on
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the top left corner. On top of that, trees were cleared and a parking lot was built where there used to be a path leading to the entrance. Both the electronics
store
and the sports
store
were relocated to the north of the shopping
center
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, where there was the food
store
. Their old spots are now occupied by themed restaurants,
while
the food
store
is now on the lower right corner of the map.The
coffe
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coffee
shop and lobby area have been removed
while
the elevator, toilets and entertainment area remain in the same place.
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