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The line graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.

The line graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.
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The line chart provides a comparison between
radio
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 listeners and television audiences during the whole day in the UK in December 1992.
Overall
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, more people preferred watching television rather than listening to the
radio
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 throughout the day.
While
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 the number of people engaged in
radio
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 listening was higher in the morning, it witnessed a significant decline toward the evening.
To begin
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 with, the percentage of people watching television experienced a slight increase of around 5% at noon.
Then
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,
this
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 number was followed by a sharp growth to around 48% at around 8.00 in the evening.
Furthermore
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, it declined rapidly after 10 pm. Turning to the number of
radio
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 listeners, increasing from around 8% at 6 in the morning, it reached its peak of just under 30% at 8. Afterwards, it showed a sustained decline till around 2 a.m.
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the next morning.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words radio with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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