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the pie chart and the bar chart talk about different complaints types in different areas

#bar #complaints #areas
The pie chart illustrates the different sources of
complains
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complaints
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 about the Bank of America between 2000-2004,
while
 the bar chart reports the monthly average duration of the investigation that was needed to resolve them within the specified period.
Overall
, media complaints were the highest and accounted for more than half of the total percentage.
In addition
, the average time of the investigation needed showed an initial slight increase, before a significant reduction in the processing time.
To begin
, Public complaints were the most common type at 63%, followed by government agencies and
out of state
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out-of-state
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 ones at 11% and 10%, respectively. What is more, insurance companies represented 8%,
however
, media, bank
employes
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employees
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, and others had the lowest frequency at 3%, 3%, and 2% each.
On the other hand
, the duration of the investigation started at 5
months
 in 2000, before rising marginally to 6
months
 in 2001. After that, a considerable decrease was reported to 4
months
 in 2002.
Conversely
, the amount of time rose
slightely
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slightly
 to around 4.5
months
 in 2003, before dipping to 4.3
months
 in 2004.
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